JC: I thought I'd try my hand and MiSTing, so I turned to FF.net. Naturally I found plenty of crap fanfiction, but this one caught my eye. Just check out the summary:
ever wondered if there was more than just one Avatar? KuanYin is the twin to all Avatars and she has extra powers that the avatar could even dream of having...thats probably why most of them hate her...
That's probably why EVERYONE hates her. Because there's ONLY. ONE. AVATAR. It has a summary made me cringe + a second Avatar + bad grammar = good MiSTing material.
So without further ado, I bring you the MiSTed version of shrimpeater's "The forest spirit."
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Chapter 1
The fact there are more than just one Avatar on the same time period is unheard of right?
JC: Is that a rhetorical question?
Totally wrong!
JC: Thought so. I already dread what's to come...
There has always been a twin to all the Avatars that have come and gone.
JC: Was her name Mary Sue?
Her name is Avatar Kuan-Yin,
JC: Close enough.
she was the twin to the first Avatar, and she then had a spell placed upon her at sixteen
JC: How convenient, she's the perfect age to have angsty romance and hawt sex with all of the canon characters!
to live forever so she could help other Avatars after her brother.
JC: Wait, I thought *each* Avatar had a twin.
Ever since then she has waited to the day that she would fall in love
JC: with her brother
so the spell would break and she would live with her love forever.
JC: Or at least until she died.
But only if he returned her feelings and promised to marry her, only then will she be able to break free from the curse. But for now,
JC: She would remain... A BEAST.
to a group of benders on a god-forsaken island, she is the spirit of the forest
JC: FOREST SPIRIT! TAKE BACK YOUR HEAD!
and that is where our story
JC: ends.
begins
JC: You mean it hasn't started yet?
Aang, Katara and Sokka were taking a rest out side of any country that was around.
JC: Pick a country, any country!
Yep, in the ocean.
JC: Yep, it was wet.
Sokka was still upset about Yue dying.
JC: *Still*? Why? It's not as if they were in love or anything.
They were away from everything, ice, islands, an army of ruthless firebenders, and such.
JC: "and such" for anything that is not included in "everything."
Aang was on Appa’s head, napping. Katara was humming to her herself and Sokka was moping around. Katara lifted her self up and looked out at the water.
JC: (Katara) Wow, I've never seen water before!
She saw a little speck in the distance.
JC: (Katara) Stupid speck, you're blocking my view!
She squinted her eyes to see if she could make out what it was.
JC: (Katara)Is it a bird? A plane? No, it's --!
She was able to see it, it was
JC: A run-on sentence!
an Island.
JC: With a capital "I."
"Aang" she said, shaking
JC: it like a salt shaker.
him from side to side. Aang opened his eyes and stared up at her.
JC: (Katara, singing) Shake it like a salt shaker! Shake it like a salt shaker!
(Aang) o.O;;;
"There’s an island up ahead, do you think we could stop?" she asked as he jumped up to look at it. "Absolutely" he jumped up.
JC: Again.
"But it’s no where on the map" Sokka said holding up the map.
JC: (Sokka) It must not exist!
Katara and Aang shrugged and then went toward the island.
Not far behind them was Prince Zuko and his army of firebenders.
JC: Even though they were away from everything including firebenders.
Zuko looked around,
JC: to see what he could see.
he was looking out at the water
JC: (Zuko) OMG! Water!
from the deck of the ship, watching the flying bison the Avatar always rod.
JC: (Aang) -pokes Appa with a rod- That'll teach you!
He snorted in impenitentness
JC: He felt no remorse for bad grammar.
as his uncle came up from behind. "Well " Iroh began as Zuko turned to him and gave him a glare. "They keep going "
JC: (Zuko) and going and going...
Zuko said looking back out. Zuko then saw that they were going to an island further ahead. "Uncle, what’s that island ahead called?" Zuko asked him.
JC: (Iroh) It's called Island island, my nephew.
"I don’t know never seen it before ." Iroh said shrugging.
JC: Must've just been built.
On the Island, a white haired girl around sixteen years of age,
JC: It's an island *and* a girl!
looked out on the ocean from a tall tree. She sat on the branch and watched the bison come towards the island followed by and enormous metal ship.
JC: (Kuan-Yin) -points and laughs- Ha ha, you're about to get PWND!!!1!!@/?
She had aquamarine eyes and a burn mark under her left eye that looked similar to a wing.
JC: Kind of like Zuko's.
She had her hair up
JC: Kind of like Zuko's.
like Zuko’s
JC: Judging by this information, I would say they were twins.
(Zuko) I've been hunting for the Avatar for two years, but I was looking for *me* all along!
and had three strands on each side of her face and a single strand over her left eye.
JC: And fourty-six tiny hairs on the back of her neck, giving a total of fifty-three stray hairs and eight thousand seven hundred and twenty-two hairs on her head all together.
Her paints
JC: which she always had with her in case she felt the urge to paint a masterpiece,
looked like fire nations fighting paints
JC: which served as an alternative in case they forgot how to firebend
and no shoes. She also had a black, short turtleneck that showed her stomach.
JC: (Kuan-Yin) The better to *seduce* you with, my dear!
She had no sleeves to her outfit
JC: (Kuan-Yin) The better to *touch* you with, my dear!
and she had a sword bigger than she was
JC: (Kuan-Yin) The better to *kill* you with, my dear!
strapped to her back.
JC: How does she *walk*?
She jumped down off the tree and began to run in the direction of the water.
JC: So she could go skinny dipping.
(Kuan-Yin) Any excuse to be naked! -winks-
When she got there, the bison was pulling in.
JC: (Sokka) A little more to your right. No, not that much!
(Aang) I was never good at parallel parking...
she could see a bald headed kid with an arrow on his head, a sixteen year old boy that looked like he was missing something
JC: (Kuan-Yin, thinking) Hmm, he's sixteen, alright, but he seems to be missing something...
and a fourteen year old girl that looked like she needed a bath and away time from the boys.
JC: That dirty, dirty girl!
The white haired girl got up and began to run away from the water.
JC: (Zim) GERMS!!!
She ran until she got to an open area in the forest. She got on all fours and
JC: barked like a dog.
made a loud roar. As she did, lion-like creatures came out.
JC: They looked a lot like Kuan-Yin, who looked sort of like Zuko.
(Kuan-Yin) Come, my animal friends!
They were all different colors,
JC: (singing) all the colors of the wind~!
and there hair on their head was rising up like fire. They each had a sword like horn on their forehead.
JC: Both of which were perfect for making shish-kabob.
They came out and roared at her and then she got up and roared again.
JC: Then they all roared, then she got down on all fours and roared again. They roared, and she roared in response. Then they started to roar, and she roared, standing up again.
(Going into their language so we can understand them)
JC: Why? We already understand them just fine!
"We have visitors from the outside world," She said. "Miss Yin,
JC: (lion creature) what if they have GERMS?!
what would happen if they attacked the villagers?" one of them shouted. "If they tried to, then we destroy them!" she yelled raising her fist,
JC: (Kuan-Yin) Don't forget: We have nuclear weapons!
she turned around and began to run the moon wolves following her.
JC: Moon wolves? Not unicorn lions?
Chapter 2
Aang, Katara and Sokka came up to the island. "Hey look" Sokka said as he looked toward the forest. Katara and Aang looked and all three saw a white haired girl, hair up like Zuko’s,
JC: (Sokka) Hey, her hair looks like Zuko's!
(Aang) They must be twins.
(Katara) Really? She seems like Aang's twin to me.
they couldn’t quite make anything
JC: of this run-on sentence
out about her, but they had a feeling they would meet her.
JC: It was a terrible, terrible feeling.
They reached the port there
JC: for the second time
and got off Appa. They were greeted by a group of boys. One of the boys came up; his hair was black and dropped over his head like vines and almost reasembled
JC: poo.
the white haired girl.
JC: Same difference.
Another had red hair that was sticking up. There was another with light brown hair that reached his ears. And the last had shoulder length blue hair.
JC: The only way to tell the difference between them was by their hair.
All four had walked up together. The black hair was about 12 years of age while the others were at least 15 or 16.
JC: People here have a knack for knowing each other's ages, don't they?
"Welcome to Spirit Island" the red hair boy said. "Spirit Island? What kind of name is that?" Sokka asked.
JC: An unoriginal one.
"The kind that spirits come to rest in peace" the blue haired said.
JC: Why can't they just go to the Spirit World? Besides, what relivence does that have to the question?
The black haired boy stared an Aang, as if he was hiding something.
JC: (Black Hair, thinking) I know something you don't know and I'm not gonna tell you!
"I’m Will," the red hair began, "this is Cam." Pointing to blue hair, "And Matt" points to brown head, "and Hunter" pointing to black hair.
JC: (Will) We are most easily identified by hair color. You can call us Red Hair, Blue Hair, Brown Head, and Black Hair.
"Um why is he staring at me like that?" Aang asked Will.
JC: (Hunter, thinking) How am I supposed to identify you if you don't have any hair?
"Don’t worry he wount do anything," Matt said. "So did you all come for the Festival of the Spirits?" Cam asked them.
JC: Spirit Island? Festival of Spirits? Why the heck would they hold a Festival of Spirits on Spirit Island?
The three looked at each other
JC: longingly
and then back at them. "What’s that?" Katara asked.
JC: Gee, I don't know. What in the world could a Festival of the Spirits be?
"It’s when we all go to the forest and honor those who died, family, friends, or any one you don’t know" Matt said.
JC: I never would have guessed.
"Where’s the forest?" Sokka asked, Hunter grabbed his arm, turned him around and pointed to the forest. "Say we saw a white haired woman coming in, who would that be?" Aang asked remembering.
JC: (Matt) Did she look kind of like Zuko?
"That would probably be the forest spirit" Will said.
Zuko decided to park the ship on the other side,
JC: (Zuko) The Avatar may be the master of all elements, but his parallel parking SUCKS! We're parking on the *other* side!
some where in the forest.
JC: Funny how the ocean extends into the forest.
(shrimpeater) Well it's not impossible.
(JC) Depends on how you look at it.
Zuko walked outand looked around.
JC: (Zuko, extra lispy) Nice place you got here, but the greenery could use a little control, especially on these vines, now those are just atrocious!
Men came out of the ship and stood with him.
(Men, singing) When I say that somethin'... I wanna hold your hand! I wanna hold your --
(Zuko) o_o;;; Okay, please stop...
"Search the area, make sure there is no one around
JC: (Zuko) 'cause I *really* gotta go,
and kill any one who gets in our way," he told the men. The men went into the forest.
JC: (Men, singing) Over the river and through the woods, to Grandmother's house we go!
It was no more than a minute after one of the men came back
JC: with a basket full of pansies.
painting.
JC: Painting? What the hell?
(man) Look, Prince Zuko! I painted a butterfly with the other men's blood!
(Zuko) O_o;;; That's just... sick...
"What happened?" Zuko asked him. "In the forest creatures with swords their leader is a white haired woman she killed the others
JC: and painted this picture of a butterfly with their blood!
" he said falling to the ground. Zuko picked a few men
JC: (Zuko) I'm thinking of a number between one and ten...
(man #1) Four.
(man #2) Nine.
(man #3) Six.
(Zuko) It was seven! Man number three, I choose you!
and told them to follow him.
JC: (Zuko, singing) Come on, bamanos! Everybody, let's go! Come on, let's get to it! I know that we can do it! Where are we going?
(men) I don't know!
(Zuko) ... me neither.
Zuko and his men went into the forest. About ten minutes later they all heard a growl within the forest.
JC: (Zuko) OMG! There was a growl coming from the forest!
(man) Prince Zuko, Sir, we're *in* the forest!
(Zuko) ...shit.
Zuko was at the head and his men were behind him.
JC: Usually how it is when people are following their leader.
Before he knew it, his men were gone.
JC: (Zuko) Men, we need to -- men? Damn it, not again!
Zuko was alone as moon wolves surrounded him.
JC: (Zuko) Well, at least I'm not alone anymore. -shrug-
He began to firebend them
JC: Because of course, moon wolves are made of fire. -nodnod-
out of the way. When he did, he flew
JC: He can fly! He can fly! Such is the power of the moon wolf.
into a girl with white hair and aquamarine eyes.
JC: (Zuko, taking note of her white hair and aquamarine eyes) Ah, I see you are the sixteen year old girl from Chapter 1.
(Kuan-Yin) -gasp- How did you know?
(Zuko) The description is exactly the same as in the beginning. =_=
She grabbed his arm and
JC: put it in her pants.
twisted it to make him go to the ground.
JC: because twisting one's arm always takes them to the ground.
(Kuan-Yin) Now, sex me, bish! -whipcrack-
"No one comes into my forest and stops here," She said pushing him into the ground.
JC: Sticking his head under the dirt like an ostrich.
"You b...
JC: itch.
" he was able to mumble.
One of the men was able to gat free
JC: (man) I dun gat free! Hurr, mah teacha dun lurn'd me gud!
from one of the wolves and ran back to the ship. When he got to the ship, Iroh was standing out side,
JC: Let me guess, he was painting?
waiting for his nephew. The solder went up to him and told him about his nephew’s capture by the man eating wolves.
JC: I don't know how he could tell they were wolves, considering they looked so much like lions. And I thought it was the Sue that captured him?
Iroh shock his head
JC: (Iroh) Gah! I shocked my head! @_@
and the solder went onto the ship.
JC: (Iroh, sardonically) Thanks for your help. =_=
Iroh didn’t want to
JC: be in this fic any longer
get captured himself so he went to town to seek
JC: mental
help.
Chapter 3
The gang was in town,
JC: I already dislike this chapter...
the four boys was showing the Avatar and his friends around.
JC: (boys) We suuuuure was!
Will explained the forest spirit to them.
JC: What, you'll give us the description of Kuan-Yin time after time but you won't give us a lengthy explaination of the forest spirit?
(shrimpeater) Careful what you wish for... -cackle-
(JC) Ulp... O_O;;;
"She also controls the Moon wolves," Cam said. "The what?" Sokka said with a confused look. Cam just rolled his eyes
JC: Jeez, Sokka, what kind of moron are you? Don't you know about the moon wolves?
and said "don’t worry you will find out soon enough"
JC: That's not very reassuring, Cam.
Aang was ignoring them
JC: because he totally didn't care about spirits or anything
and was looking around at the wooden spirits in stores and all sorts of stuff that the villagers created from the spirits.
JC: For example, you could buy the spirit mug! Well of course it's invisible, it's made from spirits!
He then noticed a fire nation man coming in from the other side.
JC: (Aang) OMG!
He could see,
JC: (Aang) -gasp- I can see?! HALLELUJAH!
it was Iroh and he looked like he just woke up from a nightmare. He knew that Iroh wouldn’t do anything to him,
JC: especially because Iroh and his nephew had been hunting him down the past two years,
so he went up to him and asked, " What happened to you?" Iroh was very happy to see Aang and he
JC: knocked him out, tied him up, and drug him back to Zuko's warship.
hugged him.
JC: Oh.
Aang was supprised as the others came up.
JC: (Aang, suprised) WHAT THE HELL ARE *YOU* GUYS DOING HERE?!
(Sokka) What do you mean? We've been here the whole time!
(Aang) Oh... right... my bad. ^-^;;
"What’s the matter?" Katara repeated Aang as Iroh let Aang go.
JC: Katara repeated, Aang, Iroh let Aang -- Oh wait, I think I got it now.
"It’s Zuko, he disappeared, he was taken by creatures with swords on there heads
JC: But... the soldier didn't say anything about the swords being on their heads...
(Iroh) Oh, but you're forget my psionics!
(JC) O_O... what psionics?
(Iroh) =_= I was only joking.
(JC) Oh. Okay. Gotcha.
." Iroh told them. "The moon wolves " Matt said silently.
JC: Silently?
"I’m sorry, but your Zuko is
JC: probably going to be really OOC and fall in love with the OC.
lost if he was captured by the forest spirit and her moon wolves" Will said.
JC: Like I said: OOC and in love with the OC.
"Why can’t we just go and get him?" Aang asked.
JC: At least someone's in character, Aang. -cheesy grin and thumbs up-
"No one has ever gotten away from the them,
JC: Of course they haven't. They've all fallen in love with the OC.
it’s just how it is" Will finished. Aang looked at Hunter
JC: with passion and lust
and he turned around and began to walk to the forest. "Hey where are you going?" Matt yelled at Hunter.
JC: (Hunter, thinking) I'm getting out of this fanfic before it's too late, and I suggest you do the same.
"We better go and follow him before he hurts himself " Cam said following him.
JC: You're both going to get eaten.
Aang looked at Sokka and Katara, then to Iroh and then went into the direction Hunter went.
JC: Copycat.
Then they followed him.
JC: It was like a parade!
Zuko was having a hard time living with the moon wolves.
JC: Especially comprehending that, no matter how much they looked like lions, they were wolves.
He was hung upside down by his feet as moon wolves were circling underneath him.
JC: Or they might not have been circling him. It was hard to tell with all of the blood draining into his head.
"Don’t worry, they won’t bite unless I tell them to" the woman with white hair said.
JC: WOW, she has white hair? Does it look kind of like Zuko's, but with three strands on each side of her face and one in front of her left eye that had a wing-shaped scar on it?!!
"You have no idea what you’re getting into" Zuko said, snapping at her.
JC: (Zuko, snapping turtle style) Nark nark nark!
She walked up to him seductively,
JC: Oh please no...
and said, "Oh, I don’t do I?" She reached for his chin and said "
JC: Your powers are USELESS, Crimson Chin!
At least I’m not the one loosing honor, my throne and my country all at one time" His eye’s went wide as
JC: he read all of the grammar mistakes in that sentence.
she said that. "How do you "? He started. She grabbed his ponytail
JC: that kind of looked like hers
and made him look at her.
JC: breasts.
"I know everything about you Prince Zuko, from your scare to the blue spirit, I know, I’ve been watching you since you were born into this world"
JC: (Zuko) How did you know about my fear of anything aquamarine?!
She told him, he couldn’t get his eyes off of
JC: this run-on sentence.
her aquamarine eyes.
JC: In fact, nobody could. Anyone who saw her aquamarine eyes had to stare at them constantly. They were just. that. cool.
She smirked lightly
JC: as opposed to her normal heavy smirk,
and rubbed the top of his head.
JC: It wasn't nearly as hard as *her* skull, and certainly lacked the thickness.
She than backed up and walked off. Before She left,
JC: She claimed herself to be a God and DEMANDED that Her name be capitalized always, even if She was being refered to with pronouns.
she let off a little roar.
JC: (Kuan-Yin) Me-YOW! ;3
The lion roared back, not agreeing and she let off a growl
JC: Glad I got that off my chest.
and the wolf backed off, and she left.
JC: Finally ending the run-on.
She went to another clearing that had an ocean view and a burned out campfire. She went to a tree close to the water.
JC: Ignoring the fact that trees don't standardly grow very close to the ocean.
(shrimpeater) *Some* trees do!
(JC) Yeah, but they're not in the forest. =_=;;
She sat at the foot of the tree and then she felt an apple hit her in the head.
JC: (Kuan-Yin) I have discovered gravity!
She rubbed her head and looked up. She saw the other white haired girl
JC: WHAT?! There're *two* of them?
that she resurrected at the North Pole.
JC: Resurrected?! No... it's can't be...
"Hi, Yue"
JC: Nuuuuuuu!!
she said putting her hands behind her head. The girl jumped down and landed on her feet.
JC: Because Yue's just that atheletic.
She had a basket full of
JC: severed human heads.
fruit. "Hi Kuan-Yin" she said patting her on the head. "What’s new?" Yue asked Kuan.
JC: (Kuan-Yin) Gravity! Dude, check out this apple!
"We have visitors ." Kuan started. "Really Who?" Yue asked, putting the basket in a tree.
JC: Great place for a basket.
"A Kid with arrows all over him, his two friends and a spoiled firebending Prince and his army " Kuan told her. Yue turned to her and sat on
JC: her lap.
the ground. "You mean the Avatar is here?" Yue asked and Kuan-Yin shrugged. "That means Sokka’s here" Yue jumped up and began to spin around. "Who? Your boyfriend, Yue?" Kuan smirked at her hyperactive friend.
JC: Can Yue *do* hyperactive?
Yue looked at her and smiled that said ‘I wish’
JC: (Yue's smile) this fanfic would end.
"You will be putting my life and place on the line, why did I bring you back?" Kuan tried to remember why.
JC: To spare us from a SokkaOC pairing.
"Because you need a friend and I need to learn darkness bending,"
JC: WAIT- darkness bending? This is worse than I thought!
Yue said grabbing Kuan’s
JC: breasts.
hand. She remembered when she went to the North Pole right after she died and in the middle of the night, Kuan-Yin brought her back and they made a promised each other that if Yue would be Kuan’s friend that Kuan would teach Yue darkness bending.
JC: and they would be best friends forever and lead an army of moon wolves who were actually more like unicorn lions and they would capture prince zuko and use incorrect grammar and run-on sentences kind of like this one i'm typing right now isn't that ironic how funny is that and by funny i don't mean funny haha i mean funny weird!!!!!1oen
Kuan-Yin put her hands down as the bushes began to move.
JC: I'm afraid to ask why the bushes are moving.
Kuan looked up and Yue went behind her non-fear friend,
JC: "Non-fear?" WHAT THE HELL?!
as a young woman from Koshyi came up.
JC: Ooooh no, *please* don't tell me it's *another* OOC canon character...
"What’s up, Suki?"
JC: -shoots herself in the face-
Kuan asked as Yue got up
JC: Even though she was already up,
and sighed in relive. Suki had her make up off and wearing a regular silver and white type kimono.
JC: shrimpeater use the wrong tense in both of those sentence and she also use random word of type.
Yue was getting up
JC: again
and she fell back down.
JC: again.
Kuan pushed her up
JC: again
as Suki said "Nothing new yet, but I did see the firebending prince
JC: Which firebending prince? I don't know! I've never seen him before!
hanging up side down with your wolves around him, so you did that right?" Kuan
JC: barfed up her lunch upon seeing Suki so out of character.
nodded. Suki sat down as Yue grabbed the basket of fruit.
JC: (Yue) Now, which tree did I put that basket of fruit in again?
"Kuan-Yin found the Avatar today" Yue said. Suki grabbed an apple and bit it. "That’s interesting, say are we going to the future any time soon?" Suki asked them.
JC: -impales herself with a dull spoon-
Chapter 4
Aang was following Hunter; the others seemed to get farther behind. "Hey wait up," Aang yelled at him.
JC: Because Aang is just way too slow to keep up with a normal human child.
Hunter just turned his head and kept walking.
JC: Smack into a tree.
Aang finally got to him and they kept at the same pace. Then Hunter stopped, Aang stopped too. Aang stared at
JC: the horrible sentence structure in this fic.
Hunter, as he was listening to the forest. Aang could hear growling, but not toward him, but else where.
JC: But it was nearby, but it was far away, but it wasn't coming from him, but it wasn't coming from Hunter.
Him and Hunter
JC: -shoots herself-
went into bushes and pecked out
JC: (Woody the Woodpecker) -crazed laugh-
and saw Zuko hanging up side down with wolves under him, growling at him.
JC: They were still circling. Or maybe they weren't. Zuko couldn't tell.
"What do we do?" Aang asked him. "There is a way to get the moon wolves scared of you " Hunter began.
JC: (Aang, obnoxiously) What do you want me to do, dress in drag and do the hula?
Aang looked shock
JC: (Aang) Ow! I just felt a shock!
that he talked and then shock his head.
JC: (Aang) -bzzt- Ow! My head!
"You have to hit them in the
JC: crotch!
horn, they will be scared of you" Hunter finished. "Hit them, with what?" Aang asked him as he got up.
JC: (Hunter) Use your M4D 1337 Sk1LLz!
"Try your airbending" Hunter said walking out of the bushes. The Wolves all came around him. Hunter looked them square in the eye, and they jumped for him. He didn’t make a move until they were right there when he disappeared.
JC: Didn't see that one coming. Let me guess, he's a time-and-space bender. =_=;;;
Zuko looked around and Aang was still confused.
JC: So was Zuko, but he was confused about everything, having to hang upside down for so long.
When Hunter reappeared, he shot a little black and dark purple spear at them.
JC: He's a darkbender, isn't he? =_=;;;;;
It hit one of the wolf’s horn and he let out a cry. He than sat down, Aang figured out what he meant. And he jumped out and
JC: attacked them with bad grammar!
shot air balls at them. When they all had ran off,
JC: -coughs up blood-
Aang and Hunter went up to Zuko and untied him.
JC: And they instantly became friends. -barfs up her internal organs-
"Even though I don’t want to say this but thanks," Zuko stuttered.
JC: Wow! Bad grammar, a stutter, *and* a lisp!
Aang just smiled at him. "Who is this kid?" Zuko asked, pointing to Hunter.
JC: The *Avatar* is standing RIGHT THERE, fool! Grab him and run!
(Zuko) I know... -sob- but the author *commands* that I not capture him!
(JC) You poor, poor soul...
"That’s Hunter" Aang said. "What kind of bender are you?" Zuko asked him, Hunter just pointed to his shadow on the ground.
JC: Darkbender. Haven't you been reading?
(Zuko) Not if I can help it!
(JC) You're a smart man, Zuko... a *very* smart man... -shudders-
"Say who did this to you, Zuko?" Aang asked him as he got up.
JC: Was it the girl with the white hair that's kind of like Zuko's and the aquamarine eyse of DEATH?!
"That white haired girl with aquamarine eyes "
JC: Just as I feared... Zuko, I hate to tell you this, but... but...
(Zuko) What is it, doctor? Is it bad?
(JC) Zuko... I am so sorry... it seems... you are out of character.
(Zuko) Nooooooooo!
Zuko said beginning to walk in the same direction she went earlier.
JC: I'm suprised he's regained his sense of direction at this point.
Hunter and Aang stared at him and then looked at each other, they both got up and followed him.
JC: (sarcastically) Didn't see that one coming.
Kuan-Yin could hear the wolves coming, she looked over and saw them running towards them.
JC: The run-ons, they are haunting me and they come and haunt me.
Yue was separating the fruit and Suki was at the waters edge getting fish.
JC: Heaven forbid the fruit be mingled.
Kuan was starting up the fire when the wolves came up.
JC: Then they came up to her.
They bowed to them, showing respect and then began to make
JC: wild sex
noises. Kuan made noises back. Yue looked at Suki with a face that read
JC: 'Is she *always* this horny?'
‘what are they saying?’ Suki gave her one in return.
JC: One what? -shudders-
(We’re translating again the noises that Yue and Suki don’t understand) "What? He got away?" Kuan said angrily as her hair flew up like flames.
JC: Kind of like Zuko's.
(hair) Up, up, and AWAY!!!
"We’re deeply sorry, miss Yin, but Hunter and the boy with arrows on him saved him, there was nothing we could have done"
JC: (wolf) Well, we could have just sucked it up and gouged out their hearts with the swords on our heads, but we weren't really thinking at the time.
the wolf in front said still bowed down to her. Kuan’s hair went
JC: KABOOM!
down and her temper fell, "Hunter that boy is getting in my way for the last time" Kuan said. "What’s the matter?" Yue asked her temperamental friend. "I have to go and deal with some family business, if you would excuse me"
JC: So is Hunter the Avatar, or is Zuko?
Kuan-Yin told her as she walked away with the wolves. Suki walked up to Yue and asked, "What was that all about?" Yue just shrugged.
JC: As if Yue had any idea what was going on.
(Yue) I gave up trying to figure it out.
(JC) You, too, are wise.
"Great we lost Hunter and Aang" Katara said in annoyance.
JC: Because we all know how Katara is always annoyed with Aang.
She was with the Sokka, Iroh, Will, Cam, and Matt looking for the white haired girl.
JC: Who looked kind of like Zuko.
"This is just beautiful," Sokka said agreeing with his sister. Then the saw a white haired girl run by with a bunch of wolves running behind her.
JC: (Sokka) Is that Yue?! -hope hope-
"That’s her Right?" Katara asked Will. Will nodded
JC: (Sokka, sadly) Damn it...
and they went running after her.
Chapter 5
"Hey Zuko where are you going?" Aang asked him as he and Hunter followed him.
JC: Way to be, Aang. Follow around the man who's been trying to capture you for the past two years of his life.
"Tell him to calm down and not to get me involved ." Hunter told Aang.
JC: (Hunter) Tell him I'm not in the mood for angry buttsecks.
"Hey Zuko, Hunter said-" Aang was interrupted by
"I heard what he said, I’m not deaf you know" Zuko barked at him and then said, "Why are you two following me?" Zuko turned and looked at them.
JC: You should be *glad*, Zuko! Capture them while their guard is down, DAMMIT!
(Zuko) Must... resist... will of author!
Aang had to take a break before going on, Hunter didn’t mind.
JC: I don't care what Hunter thinks.
"Why are you guy’s following me?" He asked them again.
JC: (Aang) We wanted to correct you're spelllling and grammer!
(Zuko) You cud uze a leetle of taht two!
(JC) Oh dear, it seems we've lost them both... -mourns-
"Because you don’t under stand miss Kuan-Yin’s power, neither of you do," Hunter said.
JC: I don't think *anybody* really understands Miss Sue's power.
Aang and Zuko looked at Hunter in confusion. "Why wouldn’t we?" both said at one time.
JC: (Aang) I'll say it one time!
(Zuko) But I wanted to say it at two times!
"Because Miss Kuan-Yin is the twin to all the Avatars.
JC: (Zuko) I *knew* the Avatar was within my grasp! I had no idea it was *me* the whole time!
(Aang) Nah, I'd say she looks more like Hunter.
(Zuko) ... I *kinda* see a resemblence,
(Hunter) Imbeciles... It's Aang, fools, AANG! -points-
(Aang and Zuko simultaneously) Oooooh!
She is better than any of them that came before you" Hunter said looking at Aang.
JC: Didn't see that one coming. =_=;;;
"Oh, come on, she can’t be that bad
JC: a Mary Sue, can she?
" Aang said.
"What gives you that idea?" Zuko asked Hunter.
JC: (Hunter) The author told me so.
Hunter looked up and then back down, he then lifted up his long left arm sleeve to reveal burns all the way up the arm. "She did this to me when I disobeyed her" Hunter said pulling his sleeve down.
Aang and Zuko both gave a little cringe
JC: they had never SEEN someone with burns... she *must* be powerful! Even more powerful than Lord Ozai!
when they saw the long scar. Hunter looked at them and walked right by them.
"Freaky crap..." Zuko mummbled
JC: (Zuko) No one's actually been *burnt* by a normal firebender before! ... Oh wait, yes they have.
and began to walk behind him.
"Hey Zuko, he has a better story to tell about his scare than you do about your's" Aang said proudly as Zuko scowled at him.
JC: (Zuko) PLEASE don't tell him about my abnormal fear of anything aquamarine, Aang, it's embarassing!
That's when they felt a fast brush of wind past by them and Hunter stopped almost instinctively.
JC: It's as if he *knew* the author was going to use the *wrong tense*! Who woulda thunk it?
"So you let him out?" They heared a woman say.
JC: -shoots herself-
They looked up and saw Kuan-Yin on a branch with the moon wolves on the ground, surrounding them.
"Freaky crap..." Zuko repeated from earlier.
JC: This author's *full* of freaky crap.
Hunter said nothing but him and Kuan each glared evily at each other.
JC: (Kuan, thinking) I am *so* much eviler then u!
(Hunter, thinking) Nuh-uh! im wey mor evilerester then uuu!
(Kuan, her eyes bleeding) Ahh! It burns!
She jumped off the branch and got into a fighting stance. "Bring it on, boys" she said, slyly to them.
JC: Don't you mean "seductively?"
Zuko, who was eager to get rid of her, was the first on
JC: top of her.
to charge at her. He shot fire and she grabbed it
JC: Grabbed *what* now?
and charged it back at him, which knocked him into a tree.
JC: (Zuko) DAMN YOU, TREE!
"That's the fastest Zuko has ever gotten beaten before" Aang said in shock.
JC: Except for the time when Katara pwn'd his *ass*!
Hunter Went next and she got him easely,
JC: Using her firebender paint and her trusty pocket easel!
grabbed him by the neck and swung him into a tree as well.
JC: (Suki) Oh! Oh! *Please* don't hurt the trees! </OOC>
The only one left was Aang, who had his glider ready to attack.
JC: Aang's *always* ready for a fight! You know how violent those monks can be.
He shot air at her and she brushed it off. "That's the best you've got?" she asked him.
JC: What? You mean air didn't hurt her? It works on everybody else! </sarcasm>
He said nothing, he was in shock.
JC: A rare thing in this fic.
Kuan took water from the river that was a few miles off and used it to attack Aang.
JC: A few miles off? Yep, definately a Sue.
He jumped back and attacked her with an air strike.
She distroyed it
JC: and the English language along with it
and pushed and air attack on him, which made him land in a tree.
JC: DAMN THOSE TREES!
"ouch" he mummbled.
JC: (Aang) She bucherd them thar English langwigde gud!
She got to the tree at lightning speed
JC: -not impressed-
and pushed him into serveral trees until he finally got blood spewing out of his mouth.
JC: Aww, how sweet.
Kuan looked up and then she felt kind if proud that she was able to but people back in their place.
JC: It wasn't hard to butt people back in their place when you had an ass of steel like hers.
that was when she felt a goush of water hit her.
JC: Pwnd!!!!!1o2n3e
Kuan turned around and looked at Katara. Katara smerked and beganto use the water from the river
JC: that was a few miles away
and pushed Kuan into a tree and did excatly what Katara had done to Jet,
JC: Taught her to speak English?
froze her into a tree.
JC: -sigh- I can dream, can't I?
Kuan began to laugh uncontrollably.
JC: Why am I not suprised by this?
Katara gave her a confused look.
JC: Rare thing in this fic.
The Ice began
JC: with a capital I.
to crack and Kuan was free from her frozen prison and at that Kuan pushed her into a tree and froze her there.
JC: Seriously, what is with all the copy-catting and tree abuse?
"Is that really the best you've got?" Kuan asked, as Aang perked up just a little bit.
JC: (Aang) "Perked up?" O_O;;;
(JC) Nice choice of words.
*****
With a second Avatar, a ressurected OOC Yue, and more OC's than you can shake a stick at, I'm suprised I survived MiSTing this fic. (As if the grammar mistakes weren't bad enough!) But it wasn't all too bad... at least the Mary Sue didn't have hawt buttsecks with all the canon characters. =_=.
Someone who has never MiSTed before will never feel the sense of achievement one feels after finishing such a project as this. Kind of like, "WOW! ...I can't believe I wasted my life on something this stupid." Seriously, though, it was a lot of fun. But the fic was not. The fic was bad. Bad fic. Shame on you.
Redeeming qualities:
~ None of the canon characters have fallen madly in love with the OC... yet...
~ Although the name choice is horrendous, the Moon Wolves were somewhat original creatures. Kinda.
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~ The story started with a question ending in "...right?"
~ The following sentence included the word "totally." The first two sentences turned me off from the entire story.
~ The entire fic is filled with run-on sentences, not to mention numerous spelling and grammar mistakes.
~ The whole idea of two Avatars *disgusts* me, and pretty much anyone else who enjoys reading *good* Avatar fanfiction.
~ Most - if not all - canon characters were OOC.
~ WAY too many OC's to keep track of.
~ The main character was a Mary Sue.
~ The Mary Sue looked like Zuko.
~ The Mary Sue ressurected Yue. Don't get me wrong, I liked Yue, but don't bring people back from the dead. Seriously.
~ Darkbending. If you *must* write in a new bending power, try to be original. =_=
~ Descriptions of the Mary Sue were frequent and repetitive.
~ The repetition of actions was really annoying.
~ Repetition also got on my nerves.
~ Did I mention how repetitive it was?
~ The English language was butchered so horrendously, it deserves to be mentioned a second time.
~ The lack of logic was astounding, especially that of the canon characters.
~ The storyline was boring.
~ Transitions between chapters were nonexistant; it just randomly cuts off.
~ There was a serious lack of emotion. (But it could be that I was distracted by all the grammar mistakes in this fic.)
Credits
"The forest spirit" by shripeater
MiSTed by Jedi Christ
MiSTing concept by Best Brains Inc.
Sporked at Avatar-Sues
***
"Kuan-Yin found the Avatar today" Yue said. Suki grabbed an apple and bit it. "That's interesting, say are we going to the future any time soon?" Suki asked them.
